All Comments on 'Lucky'

I really love your characters. Lucky is just so full of piss and vinegar. I think I've met her before. Thanks for the story.

It's usually considered patronzing and annoying when people who aren't over 50 use "hon, sweetie" That's what your Mom says to you when you're five as she ruffles your hair. A lot of people never discover how annoying others really find it, unless they're good at noticing the nose scrunches people pull. In this case it's just lame, she's only three years older than him and the classic popular girl getting with the nerd.. Other than that it was good.. but that's soemthing you should work on so you don't build too small a genre of readers.

I don't agree with the previous commenter. I think it's perfectly acceptable for Lucky to use terms like "hon." It's sweet and endearing hearing it from Lucky, who, though popular, seems to have a different personality from other girls her age.

Very well written overall, albeit a few errors and typos. Don't forget to spell check!