by Mentalcase
Two shy people coming out more. Talking with each other and loving each other. Hell, even getting advice from some crazy people that helped them alot. It is a slippery slope however. ...
I am afraid they may go too far too fast and become one of the many statistics that happen with so many "open" or "progressive" possibly "modern" marriages that happen today.
I give this one a 4 because they are already toeing the line of no return.
Been enjoying the story so far, thank you for bringing us such interesting and amusing characters! Looking forward to when they start all having fun together.
Still not bad....but they are moving too fast, pushed by their friends and now also by their new friends, the sisters...Will they have the strengh to come out of it unscarred? We have to see...3* for now
I love the story and your characters, but PLEASE don't go so long between chapters!!
Too long, but I haven't read the first half.
If they are working up to this sex, I'm glad i missed em.
2-3 pages per chapter is perfect, but we need 2 or 3 "sex scenes"
In each chapter.
I'll go back& look.
Thanks
Bob
Fresno Ca.
Hey gang. The long wait between submissions was not intentional! I had editor problems. I've got 4 more chapters written and I've finally got an editor that is good AND timely. As soon as I get chapter 4, I'll submit it too. Likewise with the other chapters. Plus, I've got more stories written and waiting to be edited and submitted.
I read all of your criticisms and suggestions. I appreciate all the feedback, even those I have to remove for being hateful and unhelpful.
This doesn't turn out to be a glorification of swinging etc. It's inconceivable to me that you can do this without any initial jealousy etc. Anyway, I'm enjoying this so far but a bit concerned how it's developing. Hope they don't end up screwing up their relationship.
You started with a slow progression of her character started changing rapidly for no reason at all. I do like the story and have invested my time in it. I just feel the two people that have apprehension about open sex wouldn't suddenly change so quickly. The group scene seemed improbable. The slow progression seemed more realistic. I liked how they were fighting for their own conscience.
We have learned why Kelly has pierced nipples. Still, conservative church girl gets her nipples pierced to please a boy friend? Not likely. A lot of fun being had by all. This couple is secure in their relationship and have covered all of the bases. I think things are going to get hot going forward.