by KEaster46
There are some major spelling errors that kept pulling me away from the flow of the story. Clothes, not cloths....break...not brake... God all mighty...not god all might...etc and so on...
You seemed to really start hitting more and more errors about the halfway mark of the story....again I was enjoying it until then but....I give you a three for your potential, not necessarily for the stories.
obsessed with unhealthily big tits.
All tits have the same number of nerve endings. Argal, big tits are much less sensitive and responsive than wee ones. So much better. And big tits spell heart disease for the woman.
Crap story.
It would be easier if the three of them moved in with each other, and they all slept in the same bed together.
It would be kinky if both Ester and Karen became pregnant and the two women considered Eddy there husband.
Thanks for the read
Wow! It was barely readable. Next time have someone in high school proofread your story.
keep us informed if he does both there asses at the same time keep on trucking tenbears43
definetely strokeworthy. However, you really need that editor to tighten up those tenses. The constant switching from past to present threatened to jarr me from the story several times. Hopefully gets fixed with the next installment.
I will ask my 2 year old if she will proof read for you roflmfao
Oh and ten bear ,, can you direct me to your pictures showing A guying fucking 2 assholes at the same time, would love to see that lmfao
Your stories are great....really.
Please take the time to proof read as there are many incorrect words and spellings.
Thanks