by HopelesslyAddicted
So. There is that old Bachelorette, which seemed to get overly complicated in terms of plot. Then the 1st chapter republished under this name, and then a rewritten (and better) version of that chapter divided into chapters 2-4. But nothing else.
I hope that if you ever continue with this story, you change the plot somewhat from where it seems to be going in the original version. That one will be too much of a handful to do well. Also more effort on describing the surroundings, please. Up to this point they are simple and easily grasped, but once outside it will be different.