All Comments on 'Lustful Energy Ep. 06'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Untold facts

Just as an advice, the powers in your story are quite interesting and the building of the story seems pretty intriguing, but in this chapter your main character magically learn (without the reader's knowledge) how to get invisible and to go through walls. That kind of stuff should be explained so as to keep the story "clean" and attractive.

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