All Comments on 'Lyla Ch. 08: All Hands on Deck'

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dakotadanders about 6 years agoAuthor

Lyla 08 All hands on deck

The 8th chapter

Anonymousabout 6 years ago

Some research into how to use basic punctuation - specifically periods and commas - would be very beneficial.

This is just one example of the many, many errors:

"Lyla(COMMA) I thought we weren't going to have anymore fucking secrets between us(COMMA)" (LOWER CASE h)e snarled.

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