by mich80new
Omg I don't usually comment but omg this story is so beautifully written. Really the relationship between Leif and Lynn I portrayed so vividly. I can feel the chills and the excitement spread when I read this story. Please continue with the next installment preferably by tomorrow lol. Thanks.
Poor Lynn, her one awful experience with a guy has her thinking all men will be the same. I commend Leif for having patience with Lynn.
You have paced this story so well that it has become intoxicating. This couple have found some wonderful things in each pother and I am enjoying the effort on your part. Yes I do expect more sex, but the sensual and loving efforts of these two make up for a lot of faster cruder efforts by others. Thank you and please keep writing.
Your story spelling is superb and it has caught my attention. I love it...***** stars
"added softly"; "whispered softly" etc. My suggestion is just to drop softly. Also, how could someone have " thin, but full lips"? And what are "husky fingers"? Isn't husky a tone of voice? I'm wondering. Otherwise, nice story!