All Comments on 'Madison Involves the Law'

"But the sound of the door slamming against the doorstop seemed to make her snap out of her sexual daze a bit and mine too." (er - what of 'his' did she snap out of?)

"Each pound of my balls against her chin were filling more and more." (Her chin were filling more?)

Errors like this are a result of a lack of attention to detail. The ideas are fine, they are just unfinished. One usually writes to succeed at writing well. The better one writes, the more satisfaction one derives.

I think I mentioned a while ago that 'your writing shows promise'. I continue to believe that.

You just need to 'finish' a story, before submitting it.

SN

That was a great story as usual. all your stories are very hot.

All I can say is, "Wow! That was amazingly hot!" Keep writing!

you had me until the cop brought out the club.

the grammatical/English usage errors were a bit distracting.

but... a great scenario, nonetheless. I liked how the two guys changed positions.

great story, very original, but I felt it ended rather abruptly and no anal? ::pout:: lol

I loved all your Madison stories and eagerly await more.The reason I felt compelled to write to you is that I read some of the other coments and thought that a compliment on the super hot content of your work was in order.Please don,t be discouraged by these bean counting wannabe grammar police. Look forward to reading more soon.Steve MacLean