by Goldeniangel
This is my favorite fantasy in all my years of being on Lit. This was charming and sexy as hell. Thank you for opening up this whole world of imagination for me.
... and no problems at all.
A fantasy surely !
And a 5.
This story lacks somewhat.
We get a little flavor of the old west with the horse and carriage ride out to the ranch, and also the description of the ranchhouse.
But it's missing some things.
If The Pair already have a woman cook-housekeeper, why do they need another woman?
How do the ranch hands relate /react to the rarity of their bosses' hot, young, naive bride?
How does she relate to the community -- the church, the other women including the other mail order gal who came on the same train, stores where they go for supplies, etc.?
And especially the polyandrous marriage?
But, while lacking certain features, this tale has enough other features to readily give it 5 star status.
It's got enough naughty or kinky to make it intriguing, plus enough love and tenderness to make it warm-hearted and romantic.
Add to that language skills and storytelling ability.
Yes!
Paul in Oklahoma
I really enjoyed this, the characters were well built and likable from the beginning. good job Goldi :)
Not even in the 1800s. Seriously, anyone who’s going to be writing about female virgins needs to get themselves to Scarleteen and learn how hymens function.
- A female former virgin
I just love your versatility as a writer. This story had me smiling from beginning to end
....To good people!
What a delightful story! Lovable characters who present themselves honestly (except for Evelyn's virginal status, of course!), men who actually care about their woman's pleasure, and a society that flips Mormon polygamy upside down and shows what life could be like on the flip side. What's not to like?
Thanks very much for this well-told little fantasy....
Thank you for bringing this great story to the roundup. I owe you a favor of your choice. You are an outstanding writer, and I enjoyed the story very much. Randi
Your writing is candy to me! We definitely like a lot of the same things! 5*
I guess my secret is out, now. I want multiple men, not just to fuck me but to take care of me and be amazing. Sigh. Satisfied my soul
Thank you for sharing your writing
So glad you talked me into writing a Western! I love Evelyn's guys!
I could see further stories in this area. Maybe she could write to her old coworkers and encourage them to come out and find other ranchers.