by AudreyHepburn
I'm enjoying this story, which tells of a guy who is torn between two women, each really attractive in her own way. Each of the three main characters is distinctive and well drawn. AudreyHepburn is a very good writer.
You almost had me incredibly interested, except for 2 bits early on:
1] I highly doubt any chance the Niners would make the Bowl, let alone any season it'd already been announced to be played in San Fran. (They'd probably change that, the same way they do for weather & things.)
2] Sports connections run in my family, & I've never heard of anything happening (romantic, athletic, or erotic) "in the football field".
Where the fucks the ending?? If you've given up writing you could at least give a heads up!