All Comments on 'Margo and Tesa Act Out'

Loved the story -- but I feel like the moment between when Margo and Tesa have the conversation about setting up the group action, and the action itself, is too short! You had a nice slow burn going in the beginning. The entire first page set one kind of pace... and then you immediately jumped into warp speed for the second page. The change in tempo was a little sudden. Keep fleshing it out. Maybe consider making the evening's festivities a bit more gradual, and definitely lengthen the descriptions of the sexual play. Otherwise, this is a wonderful framework, and you should be proud of how you've started. It is very hot!