All Comments on 'Maria Ch. 1'

This is really good. Well-written, good plot and overall a good read.

That's an totally AWESOME STORY KEEP WRITING AND I WILL KEEP ON READING........👹

I only got through the first two paragraphs and found these two glaring TYPOS. I can only imagine how ragged your "perfect" must be based on that kind of a bang-up start.

1. Her large brown eye long lashes and her small mouth

Is she a Cyclops or are you referring to her anus? No wait! The other eye is green and it doesn't turn you on. That must be it.

2. This one in particular no only aroused lustful desires in me, her general aloofness to everybody made her altogether a more cherished prize.

"No only aroused lustful desires." Really? Sounds like an immigrant trying to speak English.

I'm not even bothering to read the rest of your story.

Those who live in glass houses....