All Comments on 'Marlene and Steve'

You could add some more story to this and take a good story and make it pretty great. Tell us early how they know each other. While I was reading the first half that question was in my mind and should been answered in the first couple of paragraphs. Have Steve tell us about his fantasies of Marlene. The sex scenes were ok, but readers like me what to hear more. Tell us the story. Paint pictures in our heads.

Thank you very much for the thoughtful feedback and constructive criticism. I appreciate it very much, and I'll try to incorporate your suggestions in a future installment.

Thank you for taking the time to help me improve my writing.

I liked the story, and parts of the detail are great. Just when did Steve get undressed? You gave lots of details about Marlene, but I never saw where Steve stripped naked. What about descriptions and details about Steve?

While Marlene is definitely the star of the show, as they say, I am definitely light on details about him. I'll try to address that in a future installment.

She said she was easy and not a virgin

Like she had many partners.

Steve is a nice guy