All Comments on 'Mary and Alvin Ch. 11'

Hi, I’m a cheerful fan of MelissaBaby! I just love this story. Your characters are all realistic and the dialog is great. Your attention to detail keeps me coming back for more. Thank you Melissa!

And I can hardly wait, this whole story has made me giddy like a kid on Christmas morning. Keep it up and stay true to yourself!

5*

Your writing is getting better, if that is possible. In the past I’ve noticed individual words here and there that stood out but in this chapter there seemed to be more of them. Words that I wouldn’t have expected but which were beneficial to the sentence or paragraph.

Not a family guy but I still love this story.

Curious how it will go on 🙂

this is such a well-written, beautiful, lovely story ............. I am reading it through for the second time, wondering why I have left it for so long.

very cute...

Lovely way to describe the canoe ride, all the nature and such. It was just a really comfortable time to be had by all. The story surprised us with Theo and Rachel calling her "Aunt Mary," and you had to use the station pitstop to foreshadow their impending marriage, since she passed 2 rows of wedding gowns. Nicely written. 5

One word: beautiful!!