All Comments on 'Massage'

by cjhavoc

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hells_bellehells_bellealmost 12 years ago

Good story but towards the end you seemed to rush it, make sure you pace your writing so it all flows together.

JaneDoe31JaneDoe31almost 12 years ago
A bit rushed and dull

The storyline was a good start, but the entire story lacked substance and depth. Try imagining yourself watching this as a porn; Is it good enough to be a movie? If not, add where needed, as most readers are visual:)

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