All Comments on 'Masters of the Arches'

The protagonist sounds like a sensible man, can't wait to see how he deals with a whole new world

i love it

Great start. I will read the entire story and comment at the end.

Very realistic man in a very unreal situation. I very liked it.

What can I say....I love this kind of story...thanks

Yes, excellent start.

Wonderful start of the story!

The owner of a business is held legally responsible for the criminal activities of employees and drug smugglers? Sorry, right there you lost me. If that was true all the Wall Street Mob and Bank Directors would be doing time in Leavenworth.

Okay, this is a fictional fantasy story;

Damnit!

I just pulled a Dunadwornockjounaranonymousie.

Mea Culpa, Mea Culpa.

The guy seems to be somewhat of a chicken, after all what does he have left to lose. But over all a good Start.

Who the fuck would walk into what he assumes is another world completely unarmed and no gear? Good thing he has yet to reproduce. No need to spread stupid with propagation.

I don’t leave the house unprepared, let alone my planet. Leave the house... clothes car keys, shoes, phone, wallet.

Another planet... Protection, location, water, food. The priorities of survival IN ORDER. So Tent, within sight of transport cave, earth water till trust new planet water, earth food till trust new planet food. Since we are on a new planet with unknown animals and maybe people a rifle or pistol.

I hate writers who want it both ways, an expert whatever but then they allways fuck up the basic things. Or a guy new to something but he some how gets it all right, perfect shot expert craftsman etc.

I think writers say the character is a pro so the readers think the writer is a pro, but then to make the story interesting the alleged pro has to make so many simple mistakes or there is no story.. Or the character is new to it all but now the writer thinks that reflects badly on him as a person personally. So now to help his own real world ego the newbie gets it all right.

In this case it’s the experts who fucks it up even after he thinks about it for days. AND hunting and fishing for a day twice a year does not make an expert. Perishable skills here, if he ever had them to start with.

Argh.

The guy makes the same mistakes time and time again putting himself and his two girls in mortal danger. What mistake you say.... He applies first world Earth morals to every situation. Every time he almost dies. Slowest learner in history.

It gets a bit repetitive as this Business Administration uni graduate gets abilitieshe shouldn’t have. Mainly engineering abilities building hot air balloons etc.

The ending is so soft/pathetic I just couldn’t believe it. 23 chapters of blah blah blah then it’s just ends in five paragraphs. Ridiculous. .

Make up your own mind but I recommend reading something else.

On a positive note, at least the author did finish it, unlike many other authors.

Anonymous comments should be banned

Incomplete stories should be deleted

I've liked this kind of sci fi/fantasy - modern guy ends up in strange place - ever since I was a teen reading Edgar Rice Burroughs' martian novels. That led to Lin Carter, and a host of others.

I hope this tale goes well.

Premise was interesting but the writing was not good.