All Comments on 'Mating Rituals Ch. 17'

The only thing that I would say is before Ryan and Hayley went on their trip you had told that she meet the family, even broke her rent agreement and moved in with Ryan and his girl. Then when they came back from the trip, you made it seem like that was the first time that she was there; and the first time that she had been to the playroom, but over that weekend before the trip you wrote that she had played and fuck every guy their and even used the Sybian. But after the trip you wrote that, that was first time. I was an awesome story, but you should keep track of your own story. That way it flows until the end. Other than that one thing I loved it.