All Comments on 'Mattison House'

Not a realistic opening scenario.

i thoroughly enjoyed the story despite the hiccups. do keep the story going, i would like to see where you take the characters.

I got less than 1/2 way before scanning to the end.

So who were these strange, unbelievable characters? Did they drift in from another story - or from the ether?

Do I care? No.

Lukas

You did a wonderful job with this. You have alot of promise. Forget the bad remarks and keep writing, Please.

Enjoyed this very much

I liked it for the reasons the first person didn't.

it didnt turn me on because there were too many adjectives and not enough happened. it takes 5 lines to say he licked her out

i am delighted and my experience is reinforced by your picture and your very sexy story. when i was younger i wanted a lot of makeup...etc..in women who attracted me. i have learned a long time ago a beautiful, tasteful young woman such as you enjoys sex as much as anyone. as a metter of fact, i bet you can suck cock, eat pussy, drink cum and flat out fuck better than most women. have a great life.

there are a few errors...Everybody is an arm chair editor. This was hot and sexy!!!

check it before you submit it. the one or two errors are not hard to spot. The story really made me horny & my cock hard. Im bi & could imagine orally servicing them.