All Comments on 'Maxwell Takes Charge'

Don't waste your time writing any more of this drivel. Learn where and how to use commas, how to start a sentence, (with a capital letter, dickhead) and how to develop a story line before you try again. This isn't even good adolescent stroke fantasy.

In addition to all the technical things that were discordant about your story, the plot just stank. No imagination, no interest, boring, obvious, and brutal. In addition, you misclassified the story. Raping ones sister is not an Incest story, it is a NonConsent/Reluctance stories

Who let it be published on this site?!

It was bad bad bad.

It read like a first draft to me, but I think it showed promise. You might try the "Writer's Resource" section of the index to see if it might help you with your writing. At least you put a name to your story, which is more than I can say about the previous comments.

Almost sounds like sibling rape, but in any case, your writing ought to be prosecuted.

Are the comments only. The story it self was just sad. I think the author... hmm I don't think that term can be applied, this person who has a loose grasp on writing techniques should finish high school and concentrate on his/her SATs cause you'll need to practice more if this shows what your writing skill is at.

very poorly witten. Great subject ruined by juvenile approach to the story.

What a way to totally screw up a possibly very hot story

another asshole that doesn't have enough brains to put a rape story in the nonconsent area. there are readers here that have been raped and do not want to be reminded of the hell they went through that is why they have seperate catagories stop sitting on your brain and use the proper catagory

Written by a child for children.

Nothing says, "I love you, sis," like rape.

Isn't it possible for a moderator to recategorize this? Or at least tag it better? In all the tags the "author" attached to this story, the RAPE one is missing.

The writing was crap, the plot was crap. The stink is coming thru my screen it's so bad. Learn some grammar and take a writing course. "U" should stop writing until then.

that was not enjoyable.I was raped by my brother thank you for the painful memories asshole

That was rape. far to many girls will remember that. What a shame a girl never forgets her first time. i did not enjoy the story one bit.

Don't quit your day job.

Completely slim but with 38C boobs? A virgin who wears a g string and shaves? Get a grip. You obviously don't understand bra sizes. 38 just means she has a massive back, not big boobs. Stories with "perfect" characters annoy me. And dont get me started on the quality of your "writing".

Obviously this was bouncing around in your head a bit if you felt the need to write it, but please take a writing course. Describing characters blankly is not character development. 'First this, then that' is not plot. These are your two biggest problems. Frankly, it was an unbearable read.

Yes the story was weak, but I doubt any of you people acting like assholes have posted anything. As for the female that was raped by her brother. I am sorry that happened to you and I understand your feelings, but if it is that painful for you, you should have stopped reading when he first barged in the door. If no one wrote a story due to concern that they would bring back bad memories for you little would be written. I also wonder why if the memories are so terrible you are reading stories about incest between brother and sister in the first place. Consensual or not.

where is the damn delete button when we need it?? DO ALL READERS A FAVOR DELETE THIS PIECE OF SHIT AND NEVER POST HERE AGAIN.

No one held a gun to their heads, SHUT THE FUCK UP you Retards, get a life and get over yourselves. You may not like the story, but being goddamn fuck heads about it only shows you as weak and whiney and nobody likes people like that.

P.S. It is in the correct catagory, I have seen plenty more incest rape stories far more brutal then this one in the incest section and they are put there because they are incest. This one is tame. As for the rape girl, why the fuck are you in the incest section anyway, Looking to pity would be my guess.

keep writing

I loved it as it played with all the things I liked. Force, incest and possibly impregnation.

no good asshole,pervert you re fucking sick just to write it,.

That was so fucking hot

When his kid sister sees her big brother Max, "the sight of his fully erect, gorgeous 8 inch cock made her not protest." In fact, she got real wet between her legs. Max didn't need to rape her and keep on saying he was going to rape her. Seduction was the way to go. The talented author is a young guy, in his early 20s. The savage attacks by some self-righteous assholes have convinced HYS to turn his mind to other pursuits. Those of us who enjoyed his story are the losers. Fuck you, assholes.

Uh....... that was interesting but to the person that said the author was sick.... you are the one to look it up, and read it.... so if he/she is sick then so are you

Lost interest after the first paragraph, could have been a great story, but there was no development of characters, no plot, no buildup to the sex scene, you just jumped straight in to it...it was kind of all over the place, try reading the story out loud before publishing it to ensure it makes sense.

You should have talked about the sex more

WE NEED PART TWO

Seriously I’m fucking hard!

In part two she should get pregnant and he should take her daughter’s virginity too!