All Comments on 'Maya's Story Ch. 04'

Please make it a bit longer

Apparently, elementary school was a challenge! A 3-panel comic strip has more plot line & character development then this pile of do-do. Are you going to torture the masses with more of this bullshit? Perhaps your author-like fetish is to stir up more comments? Then you are just like the "professional commentators" out here. If it smells like dog shit, it is indeed dog shit.

Hairy women are a complete turn on. Carry on

I think the story is hot and I'm looking forward to more.

stories on the net/ One is too many. It's bad enough that most of American jobs have gone to these countries and we, the tax pater, are plagued with have to support you little drippy dicked creeps that have overpopulated your countries, and you are too lazy to help yourself. Eat you damned sacred cows and stop mooching off us and stop writing your stupid hairy female alley oop stories. I like some hair but only on cunts, not on faces or chest as your story says...

All Pakis and Indins go home with the Mexican illegals...we don't want you

The tone of a couple of these comments is rather sick. For your information, previous commenter, people from India and Pakistan are not taking jobs away from Americans, American companies are. They are giving the work to other countries, so blame Dell and IBM and whoever else is outsourcing their work abroad. The workers there are simply taking what they are offered. If you're going to be a racist, at least have a clue about what you are talking about so you don't completely humiliate yourself.

While this story is mere fiction, the characterization is quite off the mark.<P>

Indian men are non-confrontational with foreigners, but owing to the muslim/victorian influence of British/Mughal period they tend to view their women as inalienable "property". Why else would there be so many cases of honor-killings in Pakistan/India? Most of them are extremely chauvinistic.<P>

So the stereotype of the wimp husband of your story doesn't really applies to an Indian/Pakistani. An Indian/Pakistani husband may very well want to share his wife, but the attitude will be like magnanimous sharing of "property". He wouldn't beg to watch but would rather tell you that he WILL watch. <P>

And since Indian men are community driven, if you chose to violate his "property" without his "permission", he would do almost anything to retain his honor and salve his ego. That may range from beating up the wife, murdering her, or appealing to the "honour" of other Indians/Pakistanis he knows and taking their help to lynch the "firangi" who stole his wife(he would twist his own part in it ofcourse). Losing one's woman is considered a major stigma in asian society. even if the husband was meek, his friends will taunt him into action or would deal with the matter themselves, to "solve the matter". It will not be dealt with, in a light manner.<P>

You probably liked the idea of "docile meek Indian woman" and used that as the heroine of your story. But the depicted reaction of the husband is pretty much impossible. It may be possible theoretically and in your imagination, but never in practicality. There is too much pressure from society and community regards "honor" and even though there may very well be Indian/Pakistani men who may be submissive in private, when it comes to their wives they have to act macho in public to at least save face. They would take lots of crap/humiliation at workplace, but never where their woman was concerned. Try it just once, if you don't believe me.<P>

It would have been more believable if the husband came up with friends and threatened the hero, left and then returned again alone to do a turn-about to request to watch.<P>

Just my two cents.