All Comments on 'Maybe She'll Say Yes'

So, is Audrey's mom going to guide this pair through their next art session... or their next sex session?

usually,this kind of genre isn't my cup of tea, but what a piece! you got me reading!

thanks for the story!

Thanks for doing this piece. You did the transitions well but the sex might have had a little more time and softness to it. Second chapter for that, right?

and well developed. Thank you.

Please write a continuation.

Very deftly handled! Kudos!

What a brilliant piece of tease - the story I mean.

Really loved your story. I hope we'll see more of his paintings... Thanks

Keep up the good work--really enjoyed it

Shame he had to kiss and tell.....John

Cute, funny and good. I like your humor and your style of writing- life shouldn't be too serious.

Secretaries Day has always been a favourite of mine and now you struck with another one every bit as good. Great pacing, excellent dialogue and cute, funny tone with real likable characters. Bravo! Good luck with the contest

A very fun and well written story, that brought the characters to life in a few believable settings! Thanks for sharing

I loved reading this story. You really made the characters believable and likable.

This was a very nice first time story. It's hot, very hot, and the characters are real. And of course the hero talks about his conquest. Guys that age always do. I liked the story and my only question although this isn't set up for a followup is that - and this is probably just my dirty mind - but were you setting the stage for the artist taking a run at the model's mom? I don't know why, but it had that feel. If so, I'd definitely keep my eyes open for the next installment.

Well done.

Wonderful characters and I think every guy has felt like Alex about asking someone special a important question. Hope to read more of your work.

on a site with so much clique crap, this is truely a gem.

Finely written, enough good dialogue to make your characters entirely credible. And his fumbling about the nude posing, and the sex, was incredibly realistic. It may be your first story on Lit, but no way is it your first story. Outstanding. Thank you so much.

Awesome for a first(at least here)story, I'll be looking forward to more.

These characters were all very realistic, which made the story great. It's nice to read about people who seem real.

Plus, the story was super-hot. Great work!

Well told, logical, thoughtful. What more can one ask ?

. . . but your story definitely impresses me! It's well laid out, the characters have depth, and the sex flowed naturally from the plot, unlike so many stories in which it's gratuitous. I love how Alex is slightly awkward in his approach to Audrey, but he fumbles his way along anyway. I also really liked how you brought in the mother at the gallery showing and she and Alex connected through their common interest. Keep writing; you're good.

It's still a terrific story, with rounded characters, a good plot and plenty of lifelike dialogue. I'd love to read more of Alex and Audrey's amorous adventures.

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Very sexy! and very well told.

So did I......

Damn that was good.

Such a Sweet Story

Some stories I kind of speed read through, they maybe sexy but not interesting. Yours scores on all fronts!

Bravo! This was a masterful tale of young love.

Lost me when Steve left. The ending of that interaction was unbelievable and unrealistic!

Wonderful tale, and well told! I hope they end up getting married and making a life without booze and some nice little artists and lifeguards too! 😁