by cybersky
Clit, clit, clit, clit, clit and so on. Boring! Tim and / or the author has no imagination nor skill as relates to giving oral sex especially to a first time virgin. Tim is the one in need of a tutor.
Story line had some potential but this "clit" obsession ruins it.
Better luck next time.
Her sweetness, innocence, and discoveries are shining!
For me, you veer wrong when she doesn't ask for what you have set up.
When she first exposes her breasts.
You could easily add that...and the development will be fine for a while longer.
However, after their penetration orgasms, her character becomes too "experienced"...unlike the immensely appealing prior story.
After that, it all becomes standard Literotica gymnastics.
That's okay for here, but you really should write an abbreviated version of this
story, for other, better venues. Keep her innocence and tie it all in a bow earlier.
Very sweet story. Unique angle of discovery, ethnically.