All Comments on 'Medusa: Fate's Game Ch. 07'

For a walking stick. Cause her legs aren't going to be working g right tomorrow.

Lovely story, thank you again.

This story was awesome at first but then it has been going down hill from there. I believe that the more characters you add to a story, the better it becomes but a problem sets in when you begin to tell the story through their eyes. I'm not a fan of multiple POVs and that is my main complaint. Stick to one or two POVs. More than three makes the story crowded. An increase in POVs usually results in reduced quality of a story as the writer tries to weave the storyline through the eyes of the different characters and it eventually becomes off-putting.

It's still a good story but hopefully you can reduce the POVs...

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Your readers keep reducing with each new chapter...

TDW

I wish I had someone like Darian.

The first two chapters of your story were a revelation. The following were on a decline. This chapter was insipid and gratuitous, practically pandering your, very captivating, theme. I agree with The Demon Whisperer’s comment that the quality may be suffering from too many POVs. But I think that “Medusa” would benefit if you trust more in the quality of the story; it has so much potential beyond a quick stroke piece.

You make the story and the erotica go together like eggs and bacon. Or milk and cereal. Or maybe I'm just hungry, but this shit is really, really good! whatever you're doing, I'm enjoying :)

You are very gifted. The drunken scene was, in my opinion, a masterpiece.

Great story, love the action and the great sex. Very cool!