by TimidLilKitty
I will be looking for more stories by you, I enjoyed the slow seductive build up and then the highly sexed climax. you made the story come alive. Well done.
story -- how about putting it together with some nice English skills, spelling, punctuation, and grammar?
I note your last commentator couldn't spell arousal.... so I presume that there are readers out there for whom the basics are not important.
Get an editor. Buy a book on grammar and read it! Then put it to use.
Gypsy