All Comments on 'Melody and Kaiden Ch. 01'

I'm loving this story. It's really great work! Please, please update soon! Can u keep the pages three or more. LOL! I love it!

became some what confusing and rushed as the chapter wore on. However, you've piqued my interest enough that I am definitely looking forward to see what happens next.

Interesting start, although the last paragraph seemed abrupt.

Five.

I did get a bit confuse at the end of the chapter. I thought Melody would have put up more of a fight at the end and put him in his place instead of give in like that and feed Kaiden's giant ego. And Kaiden is hot but a bit full of himself and would love to see Melody school and humble his behind because he comes off as bit of a tool. But I can't wait to see where you go with this in chapter 2

Keep going. Great start!

This is interesting, but there is another story on Literotica by stolencandi called Lights, Camera, Romance that is very similar to this. Including the best black male friend and red haired best girlfriend. The movie star and student angle is the same.

Its too much like Lights Camera Action. I hoped that it wouldn't be like that after reading the description, but...it was. I'm not accusing you of copying but it would be nice if you were aware of what's already out there, acknowledged it and let us know what to expect. Some of your sentences were missing words, please proofread your work before you submit. Other than that, it was okay, you have to prove to us that this story will be different and maybe even better than the other story.

which one is having the dream/fantasy whatever, probably him, because she probably smacked him one and left

Um....I def have to agree. Its just like the other story. The outline is the same and too many details are the same. I really hope you aren't trying to steal her story "Lights, Camera, Romance". If so this is a poor attempt at repplicating it. Shame on you!!!

and even though there are some similarities to a few other IR stories on this site (I can think of 5 or 6 where there's a movie star and a girl clueless as to who he is); I don't think you're plagiarizing at all. If I might just make a suggestion (and please don't take this the wrong way), I usually read my chapters aloud to myself before posting. It helps me pick up some of the small errors that I found in your chapter. The content and thought is there, but sometimes it's difficult to read. I look forward to future chapters :-D

It's unlike me to comment on a story other than to say "well done" or something of the sort. But this story.. Is freakishly similar to "Lights Camera Action" and bears many similarities to a few others. I don't know if you were already aware.. I just really hope you change things up a lot. Because I'm not a great fan of reading the same story ten times over.

Other than that, you may want to consider an editor, or even just proofread your material a couple time more before publishing.

Well wishes..

I've read Lights, Camera, Romance too and this story is not word for word. If it was, that would be a worry.

People on here, you need to remember that this is an amateur site for writing. If someone is inspired by a particular story line, they have every right to try out their own perspective and story. Obviously I can't comment on whether Steadybutimstartingtoshake has read StolenCandi's work or not, but even if he/she has, they are allowed to write their own story, however close it might be to StolenCandi's.

One person doesn't have the monopoly on a particular type of story, just because they have written it here.

Steadybutimstartingtoshake - keep going if you wish. I would ignore the criticism about plagarising. You're not, as far as I'm concerned.

good so far, give us more please?

Some of the comments are just like what the fuck. I seriously never attempted to copy Lights, Camera, Action. Believe it or not, never even read it. I'm sorry I like disappeared for so long. My life got really crazy but i'm back!

I realised, NOW i've read LCA. When I first wrote this, I hadn't.

If you really love music and use it to inspire your stories check out nerd4music. She was an awesome writer here a few years ago.

Plus is Melody a bit slow? Why is she living in her head unable to verbalize?