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sbrooks103xabout 7 years agoLame Ending
He should have told her who he was as he cast her aside and just walked out.
Anonymousabout 7 years agoVery good. Lots of prospect. Please use it as a prologue. This is a nice set up. More please. And dont ditch her.
Lovely. Realy good articulation. Nice flow. Nice time management. It didnt felt short or boring or eny of that. It shows some thought in the writing process that i for one would like to see more off. 5
Anonymousalmost 7 years agoGood, needs more context
Good characters and very natural dialogue. Agree with anon on excellent timing and overall vocab/style felt smooth and thoughtfully written. Would like to see more context or backstory to make it easier to understand. Keep it up. 4/5
1inquiringmind6 months agoAnnnnnd, what happened then. Great start to a revenge-apology-making amends series.
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