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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago

Keep the story going. They could end up together long term. Great story.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
Good story ruined by poor English

You need an editor to remove the apostrophes that you use in plural words, to change your to you're and to improve sentence construction as a start. Once that's done you'll be a top author on this site, I'm sure.

Having said all that I AM looking forward to your next chapter.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
Good start

I would not mind seeing another chapter to this if you would be so inclined

Ducky7Ducky7almost 7 years ago
And this is just the first day of their week long vacation.

What else can those three get up to?????? Great start..

rapperbsrapperbsalmost 7 years agoAuthor
Ch. 02 halfway finished

Thanks for the constructive criticism. I have completed my research on my english and was able to find all the mistakes of the last chapter you mentioned. Still won't be perfect, but hopefully more readable.

I have the next day I'm writing about in Ch.02 with Mike and Kate and Beth.

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