All Comments on 'Mid Day Surprise'

This is my first ever erotic story, your feedback is appreciated!

I'm not sure if this is a standalone story or if it's the start of a series but there are endless possibilities for these characters. At least a few more chapters worth, if not more. I didn't notice any grammatical errors or misspelled words. I would have liked to see Bruce be more dominant....Diana seemed to call all of the shots in their relationship whereas he came across as submissive and kinda wimpy. Maybe for their next Friday encounter, switch their roles around. Also, I would've liked a description of the characters, their ages & appearances. Aside from those small details, I enjoyed this story a lot & would like to read more.

Great thanks... yeah I thought about descriptions... I'll include some in further stories... there is another story waiting for approval that continues with these characters

I liked how you presented the story. More descriptions of the characters would add to the story. Well done. Looking forward to reading more.

Great job....open marriages make for great stories!