Mid-Summer Heat

I appreciate your insight immensely, feedback has helped me grow so much during my new hand in writing. I see you're very knowledgeable in this genre, if you could direct me towards some of your work or others you find more appealing- I'd sincerely respect the gesture. I'm certain by your comment, you know what good writing should entail and I could use all the knowledge I can get- educate me, please. With this being said let me enlighten you if this is not apparent. Did I maybe use some adjectives you couldn't find relevant to my story, sure. I can understand this. However coming from a perverse individual herself, I feel quite possibly that I am this way because I can find aberrant characteristics in seemingly innocent situations. I think to be lewd it takes subconscious creativity. In my first attempt at an erotica story, I tried to use descriptive words maybe out of the norm that would paint an immoral even slightly grotesque picture. Maybe I'm too creative for the general public to understand my imagery, I'll work on this. I assumed we're all fairly perverted and creative here, maybe this time I failed. I am unsure how this will work for me, but heck, I will continue to try. With feedback such as yours, I'm certain I'll only continue to grow. Thank you.

I feel like you are trying to use a bunch of big words without knowing exactly what they all mean. Some of your word choices paint a medical, diseased image and some of them don’t even fit at all. But overall it was pretty good. The story had a good flow.