All Comments on 'Midnight Somewhere'

not bad really. I am reminded of some of Jim Butchers' Dresden Files but that is just the hint of atmosphere in the story. The hero with the bullet proof skull is a bit of a twist and I am not sure how accurate it is but this is fantasy anyway. I enjoyed the story even if I found a few errors that spell check cannot get. Hope to get another chapter to read soon. Thanks

Great story.... a 5

BUT

get a proof reader or editor, your spelling sucks...

great story. Thx...........

but your spelling and proof reading are dire. must be 30 or 40 mistakes or perhaps even more.

Loved the story. You have a good sense of pace and plot development and I really liked the storyteller's voice. I could almost hear Humphrey Bogart talking. Although I'm sure you meant your ending as a twist in the tail, I felt it weakened the story as a whole and wasn't necessary. As others have said, you really need an editor. Little things do matter.

My thoughts on the character was that he had done so much in his past that he was a marked man. I felt that he would be in a kind of witness protection program. Having to live a totally different lifestyle to keep from being found.

But it bores him to tears...so he has his old girl friend the ME call him in when things are found that are too weird for the normal cops. Or the mayor gives him a call sometimes. Or the police Captain when he can swallow his pride.

I made him a writer for Lit purely for fun. The comments that he got for his story were a jab at myself about this one.

This like most everything I write was done simply for the enjoyment of writing.

Thanks for the comments.

M.S.Tarot

PS. Yes I know most people believe I need an editor. I don't generally use one for a reason that I have explained in many comment on my stories. I've been told my reasoning is silly but it works for me. Again thank you.

should not be too uncommon, TK U MLJ LV NV

also i dont really buy that a bunch of people who are looking at a dead body are thinking about blow jobs 5 seconds later

MSTarot .. Great story..

As to the Grammar Po Lice.. Screw them.. This is a free site, if you want perfection go spend some money

One last comment, if you don't have the guts to put your name to your comments the keep the to yourself