All Comments on 'Milo and Eloise have Margaritas'

Damn! This was fantastic, appropriate amount of tension and build up for the length of the story, the 'action' was also well paced and described! Its great to read stuff like this when someone has a firm grasp of the English language. Very well done!

Thank you! I did struggle with the tense-- I think I shift from present to past throughout the story. I hope more writing will help correct this, but any ideas or other feedback would be greatly appreciated.

This is well paced and the description is detailed enough that you can picture the scene but with enough suggestion that you can use your imagination too. I am very new to writing this genre so it was helpful to read such a well presented, detailed script.

Very nice! I especially like that the protagonists are considerate enough to think about not taking advantage of a drunk person and also talk about STI and protection. In some of the other stories on literotica when people don't think about this it kills the mood because it's not fun to get pregnant from someone you barely know. Here one can focus on the hot action.