All Comments on 'MindOps'

Hey, I think I like where this story is going, just a little note about spell checking. A lot of typos and grammatical errors really detract from the reading. But great plot - good job and keep em coming. (eh? coming?)

It's good to see a teenager with "normal" desires. I like this kid, gutsy but shy, watns to see boobs. Most mind control is about sadism, not Jimmy, just your average high school guy looking to get laid.. Let's see some more adventures: His first time, joining the marines that sorta shit. Even without the mind control, this is a good storyline. Keep at it.

Nice beginning, keep it comeing.

i really like the story and were it is headed, i hope you continue on with it. im not much on puncuation and spelling but i did enjoy reading this and look forward to the next chapter. lakear43

Not bad at all....let's see where this goes...

I really enjoyed the story and hope you finish it so I can find out what happens next!

Hope you keep going with this story.Right on into the Corps,and maybe beyond.

I did 24 yrs. in the NAVY, and often wished that I could control afew minds.If you put him in the CORPS, keep him as an enlisted man. Zero's (officers)don't have as much fun as the enlisted.Plus it would be a hoot!, to see him play with the officers mind if they have one.

Write on! Can't hardly wait for next of many chapters of our little buddy.

Hope you keep going with this story.Right on into the Corps,and maybe beyond.

I did 24 yrs. in the NAVY, and often wished that I could control afew minds.If you put him in the CORPS, keep him as an enlisted man. Zero's (officers)don't have as much fun as the enlisted.Plus it would be a hoot!, to see him play with the officers mind if they have one.

Write on! Can't hardly wait for next of many chapters of our little buddy.

Hope you keep going with this story.Right on into the Corps,and maybe beyond.

I did 24 yrs. in the NAVY, and often wished that I could control afew minds.If you put him in the CORPS, keep him as an enlisted man. Zero's (officers)don't have as much fun as the enlisted.Plus it would be a hoot!, to see him play with the officers mind if they have one.

Write on! Can't hardly wait for next of many chapters of our little buddy.

I enjoyed your story althogh it was all too brief you left your options open on direction and thats aways cool. My mind has wandered in more than on direction so far :-) With the optons you have for direction ( i.e High School Hi-Jinks, naughty neighbor, or even givving the phrase " drop and give me 20 " new meaning staring Jimmy's sexy Superior officer) I eagerly aticipate your next in what I hope is a long line of Jimmy's Journey

Like the story line keep runnging with it :D

I'm waiting for the story when he realizes what he can do. It seems like he's just starting to get a hang of it. Then the sky's the limit.

Hoping to see more soon!

Keep going - this has lots of potential... hot sex, revenge, fast-traked military career.

This has a lot of potential. It seems a little choppy, like it could use some work on smoothing out the flow and transitions, but I liked it and I think it could be polished into something very nice. Hope you keep up with it, I'd like to see more!

Thanks

Nice start...can be converted into a great story

Evrything was great!! Even though you know where the story was going, what was fixing to happen, etc. the way it was written kept you focused on what has going on and what was next!!

Very Impressed!!

please continue

since I went to high school in Anacortes, saw military recruiters there in that auditorium, even went to all the places mentioned in the next chapter XO

Not bad, but please get a VE (Volunteer Editor).

Plenty of Room to take this Further w/o him entering the Service

In fact, it would be almost criminal to leave us hanging! Please add to this tale!

YOMEYO

Don't bother reading it he never finished it and just leaves you hanging