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Click hereJemima shook her head, but then gave a big sniff and wiped her nose and eyes. "Both yes and no Lucky. I mean, it's good to get it out, but it kinda sucks too!" She wiped her tears of blood off on a paper tail and threw it away.
We finished with some small talk, kind of hard to know how to wrap up a conversation that went so far from one extreme to another. But there we were. Leaving our neighbours house and walking back home.
Walking in through our backdoor I stopped and Lucretia kept walking, stretching my arm as she moved in front of me. She turned and studied my eyes. I was just looking at her, a smile growing on my lips as I looked her over, from the top of her hoodie down to her boots with party colored laces.
A feeling of contentment came over me then as I reviewed the past few months of my life. I think I will be having a lot of moments of self reflection like this in the coming days! A feeling of incredulity, or completion or something. What was there left to do? I had power the likes of which only superheroes or Japanese cartoon characters have. I have a girlfriend that was fierce and incredibly sexy in her own way. I had fought the big bad in our lives, and had won!
The point is, I didn't know what was left.
"Gregory? What's wrong?" Lucretia asked me. I stared down at her trying to figure out a way to express my thoughts.
"I...don't know what to do next sweet heart." I finally said.
Her nose twitched as she pushed back her hood and hugged me.
"Oh Greg! I am not even of your world and I know what to do next!"
"Oh really?" I said with a grin and tipped her head back to look down into her face. "So what comes next?"
"Now? We just live!" She told me.
I liked the sound of that! So that's what we did.
The End
*****
End Note:
I plan on writing 1 more book in this series, and several short stories knocking around in my head that I need to get out. I had originally planned to not include the ending here on this website.
However...SHE...my Lady, told me how that is beyond being a jerk. That you all have read and enjoyed my work and given me wonderful comments. This same SHE also made that bet with me that I lost and had to write that other story Shifting Ground. I enjoyed writing it and getting all of your comments and Emails.
Since SHE happens to be smarter an me, I listened and agreed. I am putting the ending up, and will trust in you all to help me if you so decide.
I will be writing a review and essay for Mine...Yours and answer all the questions I have been asked to the best of my ability. Some I won't touch on since they are too personal, but I will do my best to answer them all as much as I am able.
Thank you all for your time, and I hope to hear/read from you in the future.
Sincerely,
Payen Brant
- COMMENTS
Anonymous5 months agoYou are such a good writer that I loved reading the last three chapters but in my head the story ended with chapter 12
mzkatzeyz211 months agoDear author, why do I keep envisioning Peter O'Toole when I read about William? :)
Anonymousabout 1 year agoCan't believe I've only just found this story. If you write any more I'll definitely read them.
TaitaOfThebesabout 1 year agoThis is probably the sixth time reading this story and it always satisfies. Well written, love that thing you do with the perspectives of individuals in the story. Brilliant work.
Purplefizzover 1 year agoFirstly I’d like to say what a cracking story this was, a story of redemption and repair, with a whole bunch of other wonderful fantasy/magical tropes thrown in for good measure, but at the heart of this story (and I suspect the biggest reason for its success), is that the written characters are so good! They become real to the reader and we empathise, love and root for them during their trials and tribulations, then we cheer for them when they triumph at the end.
The story isn’t without minor faults, Woolrim and AW Dickson are very thinly written as the bad guys, plus if Leonard Dickson had so much magical power at his disposal I’m not sure that the old Gatewatch would have disposed with him so easily. We are also left with the possible involvement of Suzanne in the Woolrim incident, William’s comment about her probably knowing of their location on her territory due to use of magic etc, leaves that door open. But these are all details, not broad sweeps of the pen (or word processor), it is telling that I’ve marked every single chapter of this tale as a 5⭐️….
Many thanks for both writing and posting this on Lit @PayenBrant, I’ve enjoyed it immensely, best wishes, Ppfzz.
jra13almost 2 years agoThank you. I've been bouncing around looking for a good read here for a bit and you were suggested on a forum. You definitely did not disappoint!
Jacktacularover 2 years agoAH HA!!! You are still checking the site. PLEASE FINISH THE STORY. 🙏 What happened with the wish? I just binged this whole thing in a little over 24 hrs so I’m jonesing a little right now for some closure. Maybe he could wish for a son? A little incubus baby Brooks to carry on the family tradition? I’m dying here PB, help a fellow out.
payenbrantover 2 years agoAuthorI guess I should respond to the last few comments....
Why would a Jewish Bisexual woman tell things not historically accurate? What reason would she have for it? All of my characters have damage of some sort and act in ways that are not proper to some extent or other. My main character is so flawed I am surprised he turned into a "Good Guy" in any way shape or form. Lol
Now as for revisionist history, what section is this story under? It is in fiction...Nonhuman to be precise. It is a story that is not fact. Not even a hint of fact. I thought this was obvious. So for people to have a problem with that, I have to ask you, "How out of touch with reality are you to believe that anything in this fictional story is truth?"
Either way....feel free to email me with your complaints. Try not to spoil this fictional tale of broken people trying make their way in this world. Is that fair?
Sincerely,
Payen Brant
Anonymousalmost 3 years agoI enjoyed the overall series a lot. But this last chapter definitely dropped the ball. The weird (and frankly offensive) speech by Jemima came out of nowhere and felt like obvious padding. But you left out the more appropriate ending of the wish. Just very strange choices.
Medic975almost 3 years agoI'm just perplexed, you have a fantastic story, well written, fantastic arcs, the out of nowhere comes this insane inaccurate drivel about civil war and slavery. And bull on putting that onto your character as part of her flaws persay. Just own up to having at best a poor understanding of history, slavery, and how a former slave might feel. Its inclusion added nothing to your story, was unnecessary, and gross. William being unsure of nomenclature, that's understandable, Jemima was a mistake.. The last few chapters were slightly confusing and I feel like a few threads were dropped. Over all I really loved this wish you had not taken a strange and ignorant turn in the end.
Anonymousover 3 years agoSolid story that was really good until you added a bit of revisionist slave narrative BS... Chattel slavery and the horrendous conditions of the enslaved in 18th and 19th century America were just evil...the line about her African country enslaving her and America freeing her via the Civil War is simply wrong and insensitive.
