All Comments on 'Mister Gabe Ch. 04'

and great story

for your effort and story content!!

You are a sick bastard. Love it. More

And nothing good came out of them. Poorly planned, long winded story with unlikeable characters and a plot line that wasn't. A complete and utter waste of time to read. Not a single clever, original or interesting part to it.

This is the way you wanted to get the story back on track? Psychotic drivel

Gave it 1 star for effort and content

You need to take your medications as your fucked up sick fantasies are out of control. Waster of toilet paper

I find it difficult to accept Mr. Dane's seeming duality of personality here, which makes me worry for his long term mental stability. On one hand he is accepting of his beloved wife's situation, and starts a guerrilla campaign to fend off the attacking wolf stalking his family. Then, the next moment he has an anger-fueled break and rapes C into submission to him, and in the process turning her from loyalty to the wolf and instead over to him. Then, he takes on the same master/owner persona as the wolf with others?

The time-frame for such a drastic personality evolution is too compact for me to blithely accept, and the sequence of events we witness seem too insufficient a driver for such a transformation of personality/outlook.

Also, he is a clever lawyer for a living, and he didn't see the water-dosing and the wine dosing coming from the wolf??!! Also, why has he not yet figured out to ask 'C' for the secret to the dosing and sent samples purloined from the wolf to a lab for analysis and commissioned some sort of antidote?

Those are the main technical holes I see in this narrative, all normal morality issues aside. I should add that those issues are sufficiently serious, IMO, that my suspension of disbelief is greatly imperiled.

-- Gramps

.. the author is getting lost in his own sick desire of fucking his family members. Get your own nigger and let him fuck you. May be your pervert brain will be cured then.

Waiting for more, please don't pay any attention to the haters. If they don't like it they don't have to read it. I don't understand why they have to attack instead of just saying "I hated it and I won't read further."

Reads like it was written in a psych ward. I'm surprised that the webmaster hasn't taken it down.

its boring- i could use a million other negative adjectives towards it but do all the characters a favor and have mr dane kill mr gabe and then kill himself- and don't write anymore stories until you get therapy- while you obviously have talent, the story itself just sucks and you and all the characters are trapped in it

Should be in science fiction/aliens, or whatever suits a story about character altering drugs and multi-personality disorders.

Actually, should just be in the trash.

16-year-old boy in sexual situation. Story should be deleted.

Good to see the other chapters are back. Time for you to move the story forward. When will we see chapter 7?

I like it. keep going