All Comments on 'Mistress and Commander Ch. 01'

although some people have voted on it, I will comment on my story (and obviously not vote). I don't mind if you don't like my story; that's OK, I like it. But if you're going to trouble yourself to bomb it, at least tell me why. And, if you are capable, give a reasoned explanation, e.g., contrived, technical matters or specialized knowledge mentioned are incorrect (and here's why), characters unbelievable, poor grammar and sytax--these are enough examples to be going on with.

To prove I treat my stories as I treat others, I submit the following:

“The she ordered,” should be “Then she ordered”.

“hidden scared space”, should be “hidden sacred space”. Who’s afraid of the big bad puss?

“short, stentorian gasps.” Stentorian means loud. He probably hasn’t strength enough to be loud; how about “desperate, shuddering gasps”?

“Margarethe lay down on the large settee and moved against the man, now lying on”. No condom for her, but she insists on one for Robin? Stupid, defeats the purpose. This is beyond a quibble, this shows ineptitude.

“Poor grammar and sytax” should be “poor grammar and syntax”.

Call yourself a copy editor, do you? You’re obviously kidding, mate.

this story and regret others haven't commented. It is another literary, humorous contribution by a gifted writer. After wading through _Master and Commander_ it is truly "readable," with even a G&S allusion! Thanks, etragon. Maybe everyone else saved their comments until reading more. A fan.

I'm so glad you caught "scared hidden space."

You are a great proofreader. I wish your services were universal on this site. I might read more stories if I could get through the attempts at written English!