All Comments on 'Mock-Up Room'

A chapter 2 and beyond is required as this is your first work posted here and it's an excellent quality effort.

BRAVO!!

Good story line that could develop well. You need a good editor; too many errors and the writing is a little stilted. Keep going, but get some help so you can improve - it'll be worth it.

Was actually pretty sad. I'm surprised he never reacted?

The next one of this series is done to my ability of spelling and grammar. I now have an editor.

All my previous stories were done in a old format that won't send. I can still print them , so I read them over, retype, correct and then send to the Literotica editor.

I enjoy positive comments and anonymous negative ones.

I have four main caricatures that I will go back to their beginning. They all have something in common, but are all different.

A few are one offs, so I will get them out between the series.

So this guy owns a winery, a bar in Vegas, six massage parlors and works in his own construction company? So diverse!

I can't wait until he gives her flowers that he grew in his own green house and sells out of his own florist shop, and takes her out to dinner at his own personal restaurant where he is the chef and dishwasher and serves her a steak from a cow that he raised on his cattle ranch and butchered himself.

Most out of town management types stay at one certain hotel in Las Vegas? Hundreds of hotels in Vegas that do business conventions but most stay at just one?

I'm guessing you are either 15 or you live in a small village in Estonia and have never ventured out.

So funny!

Good story but the spelling should be checked.