by Egmont Grigor
Only a couple very minor glitches. Mainly typos and you referred to both parts of an 18-wheeler as the trailer. Minor distractions from an excellent story for a nit-picker like me. Please continue.
You're off to a great start. There were a couple of minor word errors that a spell checker wouldn't catch, but a decent editor would have. I find it impossible to catch similar errors in my own writing, but am lucky to have a business partner who can spot misused words in a single pass. Availing yourself of the services of an editor would enhance the quality of the presentation. Your creativity needs no help.
I have a short list of authors whose every submission I anticipate enjoying, and you are on it.
This is going to be a wild ride. Already had a number of chuckles with the dialog and if this is an indicator of what's to come I look forward to the following releases.
Great "tongue in cheek approach".
I liked this new start of yours, hope for followups soon, though.
I rarely Lit nowadays as a few things bothered me.
All the best
John
Some of the dialogue seems a little stiff, but we'll see how things proceed. A little more detail would have been nice.
An acerbic wit, an excellent wordsmith and a nearly perfect grammarian. Add those attributes to someone with a talent for strory craftsmanship and the result is this enthralling tale.
Thank you, Mr. Grigor
de Jay
Seems to be a well written for a story about ones life's happenings though we will have to see where it leads from here to make any final judgement.