All Comments on 'Molly's Frist Time'

Damn, there's a typo in the title, look past that and you'll enjoy the story,

This is horrible. Smelt of smelled? You need an editor because you have typos throughout the story. Besides that, the story just sucks in general.

I gave you three stars because it made me smile, I have to say that typos are bad but to fuck up your title?

They show a lack of care and are annoying to a reader.

And in the TITLE, no less? For shame.

That said, I gave it 4-stars. A good first effort. The sex moved a little too fast -- take your time, there's no rush. Molly could have been a tad reluctant, needing convincing to take the first step and then the subsequent steps after it; that would have added to the build-up.

Keep writing.

i read the whole thing in the voice of daisy from downton abbey

...we won't enjoy the story, as there are so many typos and errors that it's actually quite an UN-enjoyable experience.

Yes the typos were horrible. Really need to use a proofreader. But I loved the story.

I especially liked how gentle they were with her. Too many stories get rough and abusive. I can well imagine that they contiued to be loving bed partners.