All Comments on 'Mom-Prom'

A part 2 is a must after all of that!

It is a good story but the writing is tiring and a bit slow. Speed up the story!

...continuity was wayyyyy off

I found it funny that some of the more complex words in your story were spelled correctly, yet you spelled "came" without an e.

I would like to read a part 2, however I would encourage having someone else proof read/edit your final.

You have a lot of good ideas and a great imagination. You have revealed several true feelings. Try to be realistic and write about the experiences and desires that you keep hidden. Being honest may get your mom to help you.

Terrific build-up. Yes, there were errors; so what? My only cavil is that you blasted thru the finale...not looking for a long, drawn-out scene, but rather, paced the same way the rest of the tale went. Hopeful, about a second part.

J in California

thank you to all those who liked my story. I also have a special thanks to who ever wrote the comment named "a good first story".

It is a great story. I was confused on the dad part, she was divorcing his step-father. She was 38 and her son is 18, but he is the youngest of 4 kids by his father? The rest is fantastic and I do believe in incest romance, I hope this will continue. I just wish Literotica put in a rule if you want to veiw anything here you have to sign in and have an account, it's better for the writers and hell it's free.

Literotica is free, no need for an account.

"I just wish Literotica put in a rule if you want to veiw anything here you have to sign in and have an account, it's better for the writers and hell it's free."

more please, it was so teasing and then it kinda ends so fast. again i must say more please

Here's an example of why this is so poorly written - "Your so sweat," she said - I think you meant "your so sweet". The wankers will probably totally love your story but for educated readers the story is somewhat distracting based on the poor spelling and grammar. I'm still rating a 4.

The story seemed to drag in spots.

I am sorry for any misspellings or grammer issues that pertain to this story.. i am young and new to writing so i ask for you to just bare with me and ignore some of the silly mistakes... thank you

Top quality story, had me very excited. More please

Write a lot more. Continue the in-house nudity. Lots of spontaneous sex. Eventually, have a female classmate or yardcare girl get involved.

Keep up the good work.

I can handle the poor spelling. What I can't stand is these 'anonymous' commentators who belittle you for it and then MISSPELL their supposed correction! Hey you dumb anonymous fuck...did you mean "you're so sweet"?!?

My god, if you are an 'educated' reader then for god's sake, write like one!

Keep writing litdude23john!

dezurtdawg

I gotta admit, there was a lot of stuff in here that I didn't like or didn't make sense:

- The whole idea of a Mom-Prom is stupid. I can accept a story where a mom and her son have sex, but a prom where guys bring their moms as their date? And they dance with them and joke-grab their asses and everyone laughs? Just dumb.

- The talk with the minister came out of nowhere, was never mentioned again, was unnecessary, and you don't think a minister would do something if someone said this to him? Dumb.

- The descriptions of the dreams. Replace it with "he dreamed about fucking his mother" and you lose nothing. Skip it.

- Him recording himself was a great idea, but then it's used twice and forgotten about. Lots of story possibilities, wasted.

- The first time he walks around naked in front of her she just ... accepts it. No outburst, no convincing her. It was a bit rushed. Maybe she could have talked later about how she used to be a nudist before getting married?

- Spanking the Monkey. A bit on the nose.

- They finish off 6 beers and then drive to the dance?

- He feels her up at the dance and no one notices?

- The actual sex at the end was about 1% of the story.

- "I think you impregnated me" - is she caught up in the moment or retarded?

- LOTS of typos.

BUT, even with all of that, there is more than enough for a more-than passing grade. Very well drawn out, taking its time, the sunscreen application, the nudity, the overhearing of dreams, the shared shower, and finally sex. I hope this continues and you write other stories like this one too.

the concept of a mother son prom was ridiculous and they were touching their mothers boobs and the mothers were grinding into their sons groins?? I like the concept of mom putting out after the prom but 4 pages of tanning, and dreams made me ready to scream for relief. This was way too much setup before a quick do you want to fuck mommy? I did like the way she was dressed for the sex but we need to use a couple of points and re-write.

It started out very good, then you tried to crame a weeks worth of events into 2 pages. Not to mention that things didn't make sense. The power was off for two days but she turned on the hallway light during the video. They went from clothed to nude and sleeping together in 3 days. And prom with bump and grind and tit grabs. If you do write a part two, keep it in order and don't rush

please do part 2 and let her be pregnent and in love

Part 2, love, lust, babies, yes do it!

Here's hoping that a chapter 2 is in the works. I'm curious to see where your mind takes this story.

she thinks he impregnated her?!!? whoever wrote this does not understand where babies come from.

She could be pregnant but NOT every load conceives a baby...a few errors in syntax and timeline but still readable...SHOULD write a part 2 maybe expanding the circle but with her getting pregnant and not being able to get married to her son.

Ok, there is something so severely wrong that it deserved comment even if it is a rather good story so far. I am probably a better editor than most of the commenters here, so I don't mind adding my two cents without having finished. If I do finish, I will amend accordingly with further advise. This was HUGE. When the son videos himself sleeping, he sees a light come on in the video yet the power does not come on until that evening. Either take a moment and introduce the existence of the household power generator or otherwise resolve this "show stopper." Otherwise, the story is sound, and the idea fresh enough to merit a complete read. One more thing, as you read the other comments, consider the following and take heart: good grammar comes with writing experience, spell check comes with any standard software. (My own quote but I could not resist.) -- 24601

A Mom-Prom is a twisted concept that makes me rock hard and one that could probably occur in a place like Orange county in California. Take some open minded MILFs who are dressed super sexy trying to show their sons that they are still in touch with the cool happenings of the time. Add in some teenage boys whose hormones have gone nuclear, a little booze and I can see the hands on the ass and the moms turning around and rubbing their fine asses on these guys dicks. litdude23john let's start writing chapter 2.

lol wtf must be full of SHIT... He fucked her and came in her, thats how you make babies...GREAT STORY Come on no 2...

Like other commenters, I'd very much like to read more from this creative writer who's heavily into the most exciting kind of fucking, motherfucking. Poor, Mitchell, he's so conflicted. The boy gets hard whenever he's around his mom and feels so guilty about it. Why, though? Plenty of boys get a hard on when they're near their mother. Maybe he's embarrassed because he's got a very big dick. Well, Mitch old pal, don't worry. When the time comes your mom's gonna be real happy about that. He's also worried because in his dreams he wants to impregnate his mother. But, again, that's a very common goal of lots of sons. Their aim is not just to become a motherfucker, but to fuck a baby up their mother's mommy-hole, that wonderful hole between their mommy's legs that they came out of as a little baby. Look, a boy's real proud of what he's got swinging between his legs, his big stiff prick and his hot young balls. He just loves the idea of shooting his mother full with a great big twatful of his rich potent sperm and making a baby up the same cunt he came out of. One of the boy's particularly frisky sperm meets up with one of his mom's demur fat eggs, and, lookie here, the boy's suddenly a daddy and a granddad at the same time! He's bursting with pride, and his mom's equally proud--of her darling baby boy, of his big stiff thrusting prick, and of his fertile young balls.

Yes please, continue this story! We need to find out if he got her pregnant, and if so, what happens next! Keep up the great writing here!

needs a sequel....

I managed read only to the middle of the second page - I could not continue .. with laughter :))))

You really are that stupid and naive? - Or just a very young and naive? :))

Instead of deep moral dilemmas and psychological dithers, for you a grotesque simply came out:))

Really? All that for less than a paragraph of actual sex? C'mon man.

wasting time on a sequel. Chapter one is bad enough.

Definitely need to continue this story....more details. MORE SEX!

...in the last third of a page they had sex with practically no description, just "I shoved my cock in" and in two sentences later "I'm cumming". What a let-down! A pretty good story up until that last 1/3 page disaster. Then no second chapter. Oh, well.

Probably one of the best I've read in a long ass time... keep up the good work...;)

Hey mate that was a great story, Definitely need to do Chapter 2

This story is amazing made me cum several times! A sequel would be amazing to go with this

Great story! Please keep it going. I love what you've written so far!!

Is his car ever going to come back from the repair shop?

Have him knock his mom up and develop a relationship with a girl his age and her mom as well. Knock both of them up and cuckold the husband/father into paying for it all.

Then his mom got on birth control. They started sleeping together nude. Their desires for each other kept them in bed all weekend watching porn together. They had sex in whatever position they were doing in the movie.

There should be a part 2 but part 1 ended very abruptly.

There is a ridiculous amount of build up with no sex

I HAVE TO AGREE WITH OTHERS. SUCH A BUILD UP TO ALMOST A NOTHING ENDING. DISAPPOINTED!

I'm in agreement with the others also. I should continue the story.😨

This was a hot story. Please continue

mommy's son was too stupid to be walking around unsupervised...LOL!!!

Great story, how long will you keep us waiting for the next instalment ?.

We need more of this story

YES PLEASE !

Nice story, love the slow build up. Would love to hear these two explore more ^_^

Excellent build up and great story I really hope there is another part coming had me rock hard all way thorough

Yes yes yes pt.2 please.

Yep 👍🏻 this needs a part 2 , of the rest of the night, and the morning after,, and so on

Just ,, in my opinion,, don’t bring in a 3 rd person, that normally ruins the story. Especially since his jealous side at the gas station part.

5 stars ⭐️ for me so far

what the hell? where’s the part 2? how long did that last??? like 30 seconds? OH WHAT A RIP

Given that this was the only thing he published and he did it a dozen years ago, I think we can forget ever seeing a second chapter!

I loved it all except the impregnation part. Are you going to have part two with diaper changes?