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Anonymousabout 11 years ago*****
A little better editing wouldn't hurt, but it's a very good first effort.
Five.
Scotsman69about 11 years agoNear-perfect
You have a most compelling way with words. Two wee niggles: stick to one tense, you chopped and changed here and there. And 'solace' was the word you were looking for, not 'solstice'. A five.
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