by momandwife
Unrealistic with a bias against religion. I think something else is going on here.
Your main character started the may lay and got what she had coming. Reads like she enjoyed it almost as much as not
I loved your story :) I hope the revenge will be as good as this one ;)
I thought the overall plot had great potential, but it quickly turned into such an unbelievable scenario that the story lost its erotic appeal . . . for me, anyway. The author has a good command of the language, and obviously a dirty mind (a plus here on Lit), so I'm looking forward to seeing what she comes up with next.
This story represents just what is wrong with social churchyes!
THe best way to get her revenge would have been to bite the dam minister's dick off when he stuffed it! Nuff said!
I would like Lori to beg for forgiveness, invite the sister (and husband) over to her house. Seems the son has a connection with the local football team. Then spread the sister over the picnic table for a gang bang. Touchdown !!!!!
The Minister should be invited as well, certainly some of the team members would enjoy his cock sucking talents, while a few plow his ass
The husband could be used to perform cleaning duties on his wife and Minister..
good story keep going.....should have revenge by having a bunch of siners fucking her sister
I enjoyed the story. I think the Lori should go to the church and try to get revenge on her sister. But then can see her sister turn the tales and the church members gets her stripped, bent over the alter and then the entire congregation uses her as a sacrifice to the cum lord!
Here are a few ideas :
You should hire 2 big guys with huge dick and organise a party (for a good cause). Invite a lot of your friends, including neighbours, coworker, your boss,... and friends of your sister.
Her husband will be tie to a chair naked when her wife (your sister) will be fucked by the 2 big guys in the ass and in the pussy at the same time while she'll be force to suck your son or your brother... A lor of the men should use her as wel.
You put a strap on and fuck her husband in the ass...
But what could be awsome : something goes wrong again and you would be again the center of attention...The big guys fuck you too, you'lle be again stripped naked and they all will fuck you...
Maybe this time your daughter should be more involve. For example, your sister goes free and take your daughter for her revenge. She'll strip her and your son should fuck her in every hole...
good luck with the story ;) I hope it'will be online soon :D
PS : Sorry for my bad English
I like a few of the ideas given, mine might be a bit harser then theirs though. Not sure how you can arrange a re match,maybe just find out when they have their next meeting at your sisters house and then:
1) bring some big bruisers with huge cocks,maybe 6-8 guys
2) in the mix a few lesbians for your sister and the preachers wife and they also do #3, I think the preacher should fuck her with the dogs cock in her ass (either the wife or her sister.
3) also bring a couple of dogs, for added intertainment
If you like this idea, I hope taht you write it in here :o)))))
Yeah, the sister needs a little payback for this one. I agree, hire two big guys with big dicks.
That was a sexual rollercoaster ride I cant wait for part two.
I gave it one star because there wasn't a lower rating available. The worst day in the history of literature was when someone taught you to write.
So you decided to write porn, but forgot all about logic and common sense :)
Needs to be continued ! If nothing else , mom and daughter need to submit to her son , whether they are horny or he blackmails them !!
Please continue this story and if you need ideas all I can think of is that they need to create a plan to get all of them or at least the sister trapped somewhere. One idea is to make this like a revenge fantasy movie in the vein of Kill Bill where the mother and her kids (don't know about the son since he joined, though he could be forgiven in the beginning) sexually humiliate each one or better yet record them getting fucked while they are wearing masks. Of course the sister/aunt needs to be taken and then used constantly by the three of them in one way or another.
I loved this story. I liked picturing my wife and kids in this story.
Please continue. Maybe in the next revenge mom and daughter end up again on the losing side.
Perhaps the son informed to his aunt with the promise of getting his sister this time!!
I love this story and I have read it multiple times. I hope you write a sequel soon.
Nothing is sweeter than family fun,I especially loved mom getting that accidentally doubled teamed by brother & son! That scene completely got me and with the daughter addressing it too;) hmm WELL DONE lady
I have only read more rubbish once or twice in my life, thank goodness.
Fantasies need at least one thing to hang the story on that makes sense, nothing here makes sense
Logic, common sense, and a plot are missing. Rape is illegal by the way...oh hell, what a waste of time.
I am thinking a church gathering with lots of people and a spiked punch with a highly potent aphrodisiac and locked doors. Pendents that have little cameras that are uploading to a server. Oh and of course 18+ only party.