All Comments on 'Mom's Dance Moves'

Who - What - When -Where - How - Why.

This is ok but little more then a one minute

day dream in print.

What chain of events suddenly motivated

this mother to seduce her child?

Afterwards was there guilt for one or both, a

quick fling or long term relationship - Tragic end

maybe with an enraged husband and a shotgun?

Don't make us write the story for you......

Great story, but I would like to know more. Is mom divorced? Is Stacy Ken's sister? Will Stacy and Ken hook up? So many ways this could be continued, and I hope you plan to write a sequel. Keep up the great writing.

But why did mom seduce her son by giving him a strip dance?

Was she wanting him to fuck her for a while?

Thanks for the read.

This is okay in places. But, there are missing details. For example, who is Stacy? As others have pointed out, where has all this come from? What is motivating her? Count up the times you use the word "ass." It gets used over and over and over, way too often. Figure out another way to express to get this image across. You need to slow down and develop your story. I wouldn't be saying all this if I didn't think you could learn from it.

Not a bad short. You had a couple grammar snafus, but not bad.

got me aroused that's for sure.

You need more of a back story to explain why the mom stripped and fucked her son. It just seemed weird to do something like that out of the blue.

I'm pretty sure I've read this story somewhere else before.

Nice but definitely needs more.

More Please.

Very hot. Thanks for sharing it.

Need a back story. *