All Comments on 'Mom's Surprise Birthday Party Ch. 03'

Was a good story till you ruined it with a couple of punks blackmailing the woman.... It should have been labeled "MOM SODOMIZED AND RAPED"....

Really SMH

stupid plot twist

Absolutely turned a decent story to garbage. Total shit.

I GOTTA AGREE WITH THE OTHERS. IT JUST TURNED TO SHIT. THE ONLY WAY YOU'LL SAVE IT IS THE SON TURNS INTO A SUPERHERO AND SAVES MOM FROM TWO FUCK-WITS.

Figures! As soon as the room mate was mention I KNEW this was about to happen, killed my interest.

I gotta agree the fuckheads kinda kill the mood. save the story, rewrite the chapter, kill the fucktards. what ever it takes get it back to being about mother and son.

Delete this chapter and go back and start over at the end of chapter 2

start over this was bad go back and make it nicer

Delete and try again.

Going well until you added the junkies 1 Star

The arsehole roomate needs to be dealt with and his buddy. Ruined what was looking like a good story though. I stopped reading at the shower scene.

.... Maddog025 has joined the ranks of people who dared to a negative comment. It seems it's OK for him but not for the rest of us. He is just as anonymous as the rest of us!

Way to ruin a good series, it was going fine til chapter 3

I honestly did not expect such an overwhelmingly negative response to this story, I'd delete it if I could but I don't believe I can. Better luck next time I suppose!

You totally ruined that story! That was rape fueled by blackmail. He would be a freaking dead man in my fantasy world. This series is in the trash can man.

I can't believe this chapter is eaven worse than the last, this story can only be saved by her son destroying all evidence and taking the culprits a one way ride to the Everglades.

Thanks for the story, JohnJinglez. I hope you don't remove it from the site. I don't think it was 'bad' - it's very well written but it does take a bit of an abrupt narrative turn.

Also, the focus of the story changes categories, from incest to non-consent. But that isn't entirely the fault of the author - in all other erotic story sites I've used, authors have been able to submit their work to as many categories as it may fit, so that readers may give it a miss if it strays out of their preferred themes. If this chapter were placed in the non-consent category instead, a number of readers may object to the incest themes at the start.

I hope the negative feedback isn't taken too much to heart.

Can we get another entry in the cuckholding series.the cliffhanger of the mom wanting to win her son back is killing me. I’d love to see a happy ending.

If you write a next part to this story have some revenge in it so son can beat the shit out of chris and then go and fuck mom while showing her pictures of him beating the shit out of chris, keep up the good work.

rape? blackmail? this chapter is ruined unless revenge i in the works.

Blackmail can be just reluctance, but assault and rape are not sexy!

As a fellow writer in this category, there are few tips I've picked up over the years.

1. Readers in the Incest/Taboo category typically will cast very low votes for stories where the mother is raped, disrespected, or abused. There are few successful mother/son stories out there that do this. I avoid pursuing any plot line that allows for this, but then again, I don't think it's sexy, so I wouldn't write such a premise to begin with.

2. No matter how talented a writer you are, and you ARE a talented writer, you will make mistakes in continuity, word usage, spelling, and grammar. An editor, a good one who likes your stories, will be able to help improve your already strong writing, and should also give you feedback when a plot goes awry, such as this one did (IMO).

Keep writing, I enjoy your stories!

What is this? How did it turn into raping and blackmailing? It's terrible.

Fucked up whole damn story. Hope all this shut gets pulled down. Why turn it into this? Fucked up as hell

It was going so well...what happened?

Well, that was a puss poor turn of events. I think it's clear to you now that you fucked up with the roommates addition to this otherwise very good series.

This was a great story until the fucking blackmail. Real pity and now I've lost interest in this series and probably your other stories.

Well, this story went to shit. It was actually really good up until this.

I hardly ever say anything negative about a story because I have no talent myself. This was a real buzz kill. The roommate catching them was ok but the rest was not. Thanks for the rest and hopefully it gets better.

Please, no more!

Ok, I don't know what happens to writers. They start of good and then all of a sudden stories go to complete shit. It's like they get brain dead after the first few stories. Uggg so dissapointing

Wow. Started off nice and just ruined it.

Chris was an ass. If he'd been halfway nice, the latter part of the story would have much better.

Wow what a twist

Too much and you know it you runied the story