All Comments on 'Monster Girl Adventure Ch. 02'

this is a good story

Probably your best yet. There is nothing else to say.

Cute and different. I really had fun with this.

I hope for Marcus sake that he doesn't have to bring any more MGs home. They might drain him dry.

I liked chapter 2 also! You can go somewhere with this story. Make it your own and add more plot, surprises, or whatever you need. You can make many chapters (like novel sized). Five stars!

chapter 2 was awsome

I love your story, its so original, Im glad you have a heart when it comes to life and death, I felt very unhappy at the prospect of Elains demise. Please keep up the Fantastic work, it is not like any other story I've read and that to me is EVERYTHING!

You need to write more of the story.

I quite enjoyed this chapter. While the first chapter was more random encounters, this one has the start to a wonderful story. You did a pretty good job in the darker parts in the Queen's cave where Marcus and Nina are being tortured. I'm interested to see how Arana's children fit into this. Great job! Looking forward to the next chapter.

I read your first chapter and just finished this one. I find myself getting more into the story than anything. It's really well written. Normally when I come to this site it's not for a readers reasons. But these 2 chapters really get me wanting to read more. At the same time of having a very on turning effect, it's very detailed and allows me to imagine whats happening. I'm not expert in the art of writing. But I do think you have a gift with these. Amazing job, I can't wait to read more of your stories and I hope this one has more to come!

A great chapter, i hope that you continue the story :D

A refreshing tale, reminds me of Rosario Vampire 2 manga :D except with more sex, diffent monsters and better storyline. Keep up the great work.

New chapter please

This was really enjoyable. Not into the BDSM or femdom stuff and the monster girls were really nasty - never mind Mr Cross' stuff this made the monster in Monster Girl quest seem nice and demure. Why always with the threat of castration ? Seems to be completely the opposite to what the MG's need.

I really do enjoy your work! You do an excellent job on the story line, and I can not wait to see more! I look forward to your next chapter =)

P.S. This is one of the few stories I found myself reading for the sole purpose of enjoying the storyline! Great work

I have to say, one of the best I have ever read, I am literally IN LOVE with this story, new chapters please! MERRY CHRISTMAS!

Great idea and a great series. I would have read the story even without the sex.

The sex is just a BONUS for me. Hope you will continue this series bcoz I will be eagerly waiting for the next chapter..

Hey superb job I like he has some good monsters with him. I would like to see more face sitting and maybe water sports of the bedroom kind but please keep going with this series

Please continue this is one of the best series I've ever read it ranks up their with the story the pearl for me

Nice story enjoined it a lot like the balance of story and dirty story too it. Looking forward to more. :)

I hope you continue this series.

good story but can you make him stronger or able to save the ones he cares about other

than that the feel of the story was good pulled at my emotions multiple time keep at it

Please keep the story going I thoroughly enjoyed it

Not bad at all. While I agree he's rather weak, and I'm certain you've plans to gradually make him stronger, I disagree with one of the other comments on here in that you shouldn't make him TOO strong. I've seen many good stories like this, get thrown down the shitter because the character became mary-sue strong... Monster Girls, according to your setting, are naturally faster and stronger than humans, and they should remain that way.

Keep up the good work, and I look forward to a chapter 3.

Yeah, as has been said, not too strong. Although it would be a fun twist to turn him into some being a bit more than human, such that they can all feed, but he more closely matches or perhaps very slightly outdoes at least one of them. Maybe he becomes more powerful than Nina and Elaine, but not quite Araña. That way he doesn't become boringly reliant on them, but he also doesn't become boringly over powered either.

You really are a good writer, your able to make me angry, sad, tense, happy :D. And like some others you have the maddening ability to disable my ability to fap because I'm to interested into the damn story. :P

I am loving this story. It would mean a lot to me, a stranger to you, if this story were to be continued.

This has a good story, and is a personal favourite of mine, due to some obsession issues with monster girls-anyway, I think you have something great here. I would really hope for some feedback from you, I will include my Gmail address if you wish to discuss off page. I am willing to help in whatever fashion you need, whether it's story arc, monster material, h-scenes, whatever. Just... don't abandon this, it has potential. I wish you the best of luck.

Your faithfully, salohcinpayne@gmail.com

I have to say this is probably one of the best stories on the site. I hope you decide to continue this..... And if you do, could you please send a link of the continuation to skinnydude.ks@gmail.com

Excellent story from the start of part 1 to the finish of part 2! I know it's be a long time since you've worked on this storyline, but I would love to see it continued! Excellent, excellent work! HORA! =o)

I would like to see a lamia(snake girl) because of muscels and long toungh

This story type of how the girls act reminds me a bit of monmusu quest. (In some ways, eating and killing males and all.) It was a really good read, and I am glad to have read this, another update would be very much appreciated. ( Araña is so far my favorite, when she isn't trying to kill Marcus.)

great story! please continue.

i would to read about him continue to impregnant her and giving birth

Please, keep going. This story is amazing.

I love how you created your work it shows that you took a lot it time making it and I hope to see more of your work in the future

I will praise you on the flow of your writing and proper grammar, but there is just to much sadism in both chapters for me to enjoy it. Marcus keeps making lucky escapes only to be tortured over and over again, and regarding the spider girl I'm of the firm opinion that you cannot possibly love someone or even care for them slightly if your willing to cause them pain. Even if they ask for it. Would have greatly appreciated a warning at the beginning of the first chapter about what fetish made up the main content. As it stands I only read through it all just so I could give it a fair review.

Nina, I love you too.

XD

More please

Good job, well written

Great story. Maybe we can see if the snake and suckubus escape form the slime quen while she is being delt with by a monster girl army.

And the track down the guy and his friends by his smell. And what happens when they join the family. :-)

A android, a spiderwoman,a slimegirl, and to join the group is a snakewoman and suckubus? Wow they would form quite a team against any attack

Amazing writing, but with daughters on the way I'm afraid Marcus isn't going to be able to survive his growing harem.

Well written, interesting characters and setting, good plot development. Great mixture of making characters feel realistic and borderline sadistic. Interactions between characters are also done well. I only ask for being able to see a page or so with Araña and Nina. All in all a very well thought out and detailed piece of work.

10/10

I was a little put off at first thinking it would only be reverse rape and torture, but to find love with not one, not two, but three monster girls is my kind of story. I've been looking for a read like this, keep up the good work and I'm looking forward to whoever else this guy is able to seduce into his growing loving family.

This story has been really arousing and intriguing, great writing!

One of the best I've read so far.

A citrus, lime-like scented Slime Queen, eh?

Impeccable taste, HG :D

Really enjoyed.

Reading was both a pleasure and a horror, and I'm oddly ok with that. A shame it's been 8 years since this came out. We will likely not get another sadly.

Excellent series!

11/10!!!!!

Since it has been indicated that this queen has a rebellion going on against her, your male character should form a army of monster girls of his own, and having two more spiders is a good start. He should go exploring, looking for firefly monster girls and dragon monster girls(For armor and fire weaponry and illumination, psychological warfare), and also find some monster girls who are also Bombardier Beetles (For armor and projectile weaponry. In real life, there are insects called Bombardier Beetles that actually launch boiling hot chemicals at enemies). Other monster girls may also be wasps and bees, ants. Others could also be Praying Mantisi/Mantids and Dragonflies. You have did a excellent job here with this story. Since he is learning about monster girls, he could be some kind of healer when he is not "contributing" his sperm all over the place, since some storylines I've seen indicate that sperm is in such high demand that some monster girls could wait until he is asleep, then take it from him. Again, you had done a excellent job here. Keep up the excellent work. I can't wait to see how the rebellion against this queen turns out.