by Sludge11
In my opinion, this story illustrates the difference between erotica and pornography. I will leave it up to readers of the story to determine which category this story falls into. As for me, I find erotica to be more interesting than pornography. I didn't find this story to be very interesting.
Wow. This reads a whole lot like a bad parody of the really bad fuck books we passed around when I was a very young lad in Vietnam.
Doesn't read easily...I couldn't get past the first couple of paragraphs...too many adjectives, no flow
Forced my way to the middle of the first page, spot-checked the rest - absolutely appalling. How old are you - 14?
Amazing story! Really want to read more!
You just have to get writing now this was brilliant and please dont change your writing style it's perfect......more youg gangs milfing women please.......great
i don't know wtf are these people complaining about literature. most of us are just here for the nut.
It's like catching a movie in the middle of the story... What's the background of all this?