by quietcantor
YOUR STORY IS CUTE AND NICE TO READ. BUT IT IS RUDE TO STOP IN THE MIDDLE OF THE ACTION. KNOWING WHERE IT IS GOING BEING, AND LEFT TO IMAGINE IS NOT THE SAMETHIMG.
More , More , More, Make the story longer. Let the kid have at her. She can keep encouraging him to be more agressive. Great idea , great story.
Same problem as the previous installment. An abusive mother piling guilt onto her son. Just doesn't work for me!