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All Comments on 'Mountain Retreat'

by NikkiDawn

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AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
clichés

Could you please try to get a few more clichés into your story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
Confusing

"Making his way downstairs Steve sat in the lobby "

Both at the same time. Get an editor.

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