All Comments on 'Mountain Trip with My Bestie'

You're a good, hot storyteller, but you need to get a little help with editing. Your power of description is very strong, as is the flow of the story line, but there are grammar mistakes that stopped me cold several times in the middle of the narrative. I hope you keep writing, your story telling ability is strong.

Great story, don't mind the grammar Police. I just have a question though, both Girls seemed to really know what they were doing, so where did that come from.

This was a very interesting story. I would like to encourage you to continue this line and see what develops.