All Comments on 'Move Closer Ch. 01'

I hope it is sitting on the SEND button for CHAPTER 2

I loved it!! So looking forward to the next chapter.

What an absolutely lovely story. I can't wait for the next chapter, hopefully very soon. You are a fantastic writer. I love the character development, so much better than just sex scenes.

I just love your work. You are getting even better with each submission. 5 well deserved stars.

Just wanted to say very good story, cannot wait for chapter 2. I really enjoy this site; always something interesting to read. It is great for English practice reading!

I love your writing style! It just gets better!

Thank you!

L

Aah wow!! What a fantastic story! All the action, drama and suspense has me on edge waiting for Chapter 2.

An outstanding story brilliantly told.

This is probably my fourth time through, and I just keep loving it! Thank you so much for sharing this with us!

.....for this lovely, romantic story. I love your style. I'm on to the next chapter!

Really good read, so glad Bruno got his balls kicked.

Personally I would have cut them off and enjoyed it.. does that make me bad...?

Seriously though, excellent writing, I love these slow burn gradual build up stories, and this has given me an idea for a spin off from 2 switches.

Oh it's so good! Lovely and perfectly written.

Brilliant Maonaigh. I love it when abusers get it handed to them. Well written piece.

5/5 of course.

J

Its a great well written story.

I find the timeline ambiguous.

I can't figure out if Lainy is heartbroken over Susanna and goes into an alcoholic tail spin. And then sometime later she meets Caro with no reference in the story to how she recovered.

Or is the story of Caro a flashback. Did Caro meet her and then something happened to their relationship that caused Lainy to fall.

In the call for equality make the villain a woman. This perpetuates the stereotype that lesbians are man-haters. Unless that is the sentiment being expressed on this category (lesbian erotica) - which has a percentage of writers dedicated to portraying all men as abusive partners.

Hot stuff, violence ...... And you just gave this bastard big blue balls ? ...... But yeah women or most are not able to pay back with the same credit volume, they received ...... But its food to know that she is able to fight such arseholes ...... And now lainy, just one short intro and done? ....... You might have given us readers a little more about the recovery ....... But hopefully the girls will come around

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Great cliffhanger

What a very lovely story! I am already entangled in it and will move swiftly to part 2.