All Comments on 'Moving In'

by josephromana

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kjanekjaneover 9 years ago
Whew, so hot . . . .(fanning myself, lol)

I'm not usually into incest stories, but this is a hot story. I love how you spend time on the olfactory senses. You can just feel how those senses light their brains up for sex. What a hot, sensual, deliciously creamy fuck at the end. OMG, he let loose inside of her too. What happens next?

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
how could she?

When you were 13, how could your younger sister have large breasts?

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Proof Read

Nice story, but so many grammar mistakes. You need to proof read before you post or have someone else proof read for you.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago

To how could she...I grew up with girls that had decent sized breasts by 10-11. So it can happen.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
A very entertaining story

Thank you for sharing it with us, and welcome, new author! Your story would have been better with the services of a decent editor, but please keep writing. The more you write, the better you will become -- and try to learn a bit more about English grammar! Four stars -- I'd like to see a second chapter.

mcbtwsmcbtwsover 9 years ago
Good story.

Very enjoyable. Thx.

emersonbosworthemersonbosworthover 9 years ago
Good story1

Very good, so what if the theres a few mis-spelled or missing comma's etc, who gives a shit. This is a trash story site not the book of the month club. All these spell checkers should go take a shit

clive_iluvnycclive_iluvnycover 9 years ago
very entertaining indeed.

Hope you will write more and share it with us. Thanx for this great story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Wow

I loved this story perfect literoctica material

bigdaddyg123bigdaddyg123over 9 years ago
"Moving In:" - Thirty-four Year Old Married/Now Seperated Unnamed Brother and Younger Never Been Married Single Sister, Vera.

For this sibling brother and sister to have such an ultra-fast consummated sexual coupling, after Vera's brother arrived to co-habitate with her due to his impending divorce, they made for a solid joining of their lusts, love and lingering desires. Both of them have had yearnings and some passion for the many of their past years growing up together, into adolescence and adult-hood.

The story is lusty, rather well written and reasonably descriptive. I love the characters of Vera and her older unnamed brother, the narrator! They have charm and passion and a great relationship, as ssexual partners as siblings and lover-mates.

The author has witten a good story; it could have been longer, with more devotion to before their "sibling lovers" life, more, much more, details and description of their foreplay and sexual bouts of passion.

brosismombrosismomover 9 years ago
good stuff

but thought the ending was rushed

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Interesting story

Some mature siblings do get together after a death or divorce. The relationship usually progresses more gradually but once they take the plunge it usually works out.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
revise and expand

felt rushed. needs cleanup. needs to be expanded. beginning of something good though.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
decent read

good story way to short but over all a good start keep writing just try to remember to make your story's longer other wise not bad at all

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Good story

For the people that is saying that it's short and needs to be expanded you're all wrong. Any story that is over 1 page should not be read because it takes too long to read and it takes too long to get to the good stuff.

TigersmanTigersmanover 9 years ago
Enjoyable

This is an enjoyable story. I really liked that you did not rush the story line but you fleshed out the characters. Keep up the writing.

lovingbeingnudelovingbeingnudeover 9 years ago
Very entertaining . . .

It was a a very entertaining story about how a brother and sister have an open relationship. Vera was an interesting character and sounded very sexy to me. Great job!

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
damn

It was quiet good. It was short. But good job anyways!

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
fabulous!

Excellent plot. Not too fast, not too slow. Perfect tempo for a short story. I expect to read a follow up.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago

I enjoyed it. Good job

elrayo41elrayo41about 9 years ago
Hot tale/ EXCELLENT NARRATION

CONGRATULATIONS. The story is hot and you tell it well. A few suggestions to make it even more enjoyable to your readers: Use belly or abdomen instead of stomach. Don't use the verb lay when you mean lie "we laid together" means we simultaneously placed something somewhere. "we lay together" means we reclined. OTHERWISE EXCELLENT NARRATION. THANKS FOR SHARING

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
very hot

Good store it turned me on so much ,this is my fantasy also to see feel taste and fuck my sister

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
HOT

I have a twin sister and we've been fucking each other since we were 20. We just turned 30 two days ago. Our parents were killed in a car accident when we were sixteen and the moment we were 18 we moved out of my Aunt's house and into the house we've shared for the last 12 years. I think you should continue this story with another chapter.

Tom and Tina

rightbankrightbankabout 9 years ago
the soon-to-be ex wife was a bit heartless

Choosing their 10th anniversary to ask for a divorce was arctic cold.

A little more information about the couple would have been nice. Other than the brother's anniversary, and his feelings for his sister being repressed for 20 years, a brief sketch of their occupations, we know almost nothing.

oh yeah, there was the constant reference to her being chubby which came across as TMI.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
Nice 1-pager!!

The last lines just made it perfect ;-)

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago

Great story add more chapters

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago

Holy Shit that was hot......

chytownchytownover 8 years ago
GoodRead***

Thanks for sharing.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
not detailed

Your story is not in details i mean u do not explain the sex scenes in details

linnearlinnearover 3 years ago
Keep Going

Always a good topic.

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